- Stakeholder 1
The victims family
The victims family in my opinion would most likely not want to see the man that killed their daughter able to be an organ donator to his family. They would prefer to see Ronald Philips brought to justice. He was days away from dying and then all of a sudden wants to become a hero? Does not sound right to me and I could not imagine how the victims family feels. It would have to take a lot of pathos and logos to change their mind and convince them that this is right. They need pathos to give them an emotional appeal to somehow feel that it is right to preform such actions. They also need logos to have some of the actual facts of why something like this could be logically just. If this process if approved its not only hard for the victims family but also the judge, doctor, and the governor.
- Stakeholder 2
Organ Receiver
The family member who would be receiving the organs of course would want the judge to rule in favor of the organ donating procedure because it would be saving their life. They obviously are not thinking about what the procedure consists of. The details of the procedure are gruesome because the organs would be taken out while he is still living which is unethically correct. The organ receiver should logically look for other ways of being cured instead of going to a murderer. That may sound harsh but it is the truth. I don't believe the criminal is seeing any good in this situation, I believe he is simply trying to prolong his life. I can see the good in what he could possibly be trying to do but it is just so hard to believe someone who raped and murdered his girlfriend and also killed his daughter. This puts a lot of people in a rough place because it is so controversial.
I really like the start to your paper and I like how you are approaching the different views and the different stake holders. I think you need to go more in detail about how the organ donor would prefer to take the organ from this murderer instead of waiting for one from someone else. Also I completely agree that the family would not want to see him be an organ donor and I think you can really go in depth and use pathos to support your stance.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good start and has the important matters laid out nicely. It needs more detail and more substance but I think you know that. This should help you out significantly when you go to write the final paper. There's so much further that you could go on these two stake holders so try to find out some more information. And maybe add an extra stakeholder? Besides that it looks good, keep it up!
ReplyDeleteThis is a good start to what needs to be done, but you definitely need to add more. I can easily agree with what you have already written but your reasoning should be more detailed! good job!
ReplyDeleteWell written brainstorm. Although I feel like you are stating more of your opinion in this draft. You might want to possibly go into more detail by stating more views from other sides? The judge, governor, and doctor are key stakeholders and have a lot to say in this case. To me, I am totally against this cruel man trying to turn himself around and donate his organs to feel like he did something nice. He deserves to be punished. On the other hand very well written draft. All you need to do is convert these stakeholders into an essay and you are good!
ReplyDeleteYour two examples are very concrete, and also very powerful. If you add an introduction that maybe describes the article a little bit, it would make your paper even better. That way, the reader has a sense of the setting that your paper is disposed upon, so that they have a more clear mentality upon reading. Your two examples are very good, and you might be able to expand upon them even more.
ReplyDeleteI think this is a really good start to your paper! You have distinctively made both points of the argument and have a path to follow when writing your paper. Although this is just more of your ideas for what you need in your paper versus a rough draft.
ReplyDeleteThis is a pretty good start to understanding each of the stakeholders you have in your essay. However, there is still a long way to go. State more logic and reason besides personal opinion.
ReplyDeleteThis a very unique way of presenting your topic and I really like it because it shows it in a different lighting than an essay would. I also really like the type of font you added in there. With a just a few touch ups this draft will really solid.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great way to put everything down as a starting point. I think more things can be added and expanded with more elaboration once the actual essay is composed, but like I said, this is a great start. I see nothing wrong with this approach and it should set you up for an effective paper.
ReplyDeleteYour approach to the different stakeholders is very good and as you continue to build up more details this paper will be very well written.
ReplyDeleteI completely agree with that you are saying in the first part of this about the killer wanting to all of a sudden save lives. This does not seem right at all. I like how you said what type of argument you would use to convince the stakeholders (pathos, logos) that will help a lot when it is time to write the paper.
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